1980 My literary era

"Miscellaneous Notes of a Small Courtyard" is a very new work, and was only published in "Contemporary" in the second half of last year.

Yan Ying's students planned to use it as the text for their graduation project, and they were attracted by the freshness contained in this novel.

Among the trio of writers and directors, Tian Zhuangzhuang is mainly responsible for directing, while Xie Xiaojing and Cui Xiaoqin are responsible for script adaptation.

When Tian Zhuangzhuang said that he had hired writer Lin Weimin to help correct the script, Xie Xiaojing and Cui Xiaoqin instinctively felt a little disgusted. What? Is what we write necessarily worse than writers?

Since ancient times, literati have looked down upon each other, and their thoughts are perfectly normal.

But when they met Lin Weimin, they felt a little nervous. The names of people and the shadows of trees. As a new writer who has emerged in the past two years, Lin Weimin has a great reputation, especially "Farewell My Concubine", which was only released this year. It is famous all over the country. Gained widespread popularity.

The most important thing is that everyone has heard that he is a close disciple of Mr. Wan Jiabao. Now he specializes in writing scripts for people's art. The performance of "The Intouchable" at the beginning of the year has received a lot of praise from the drama industry, even from the school's literature department. The teacher was also full of praise for this drama.

"Little Courtyard Chronicles" was to be adapted into a movie script. The students first changed the name and it became "Little Courtyard".

Lin Weimin looked at the name on the letter paper. This change was correct. The word "Miscellaneous Notes" itself is a literary category.

Opening the script, the content was very short. Lin Weimin only spent ten minutes reading it.

"Teacher Lin, what do you think of the script?" Tian Zhuangzhuang asked.

Lin Weimin raised his head, frowning, and did not answer Tian Zhuangzhuang's question, "Have Teacher Xie read it?"

Xie Fei said with a smile: "I saw it. But I am not a screenwriter. If I say it is not good, Teacher Lin will ask them to correct it if there is anything wrong."

Lin Weimin nodded when he saw this, and said to Tian Zhuangzhuang: "I told you before that "The Death of Yura" is more difficult to change than "Little Courtyard Chronicles". In fact, "Little Courtyard Chronicles" has to be changed into a movie script. It's not easy. "Little Courtyard Chronicles" is not a work that is stronger in burying conflicts in the traditional sense. It is completely based on daily life. Such a work requires very strong foreshadowing and performance."

He turned over the script and said, "There are several problems with your script now..."

Lin Weimin casually picked up the pen on Xie Fei's desk, pointed to the beginning of the script and said: "Is this narration in the first act of yours useful? It is. But it is too straightforward, too abrupt, and at the same time too lazy. Use the heroine Sangsang Using narration to introduce the characters in the courtyard, can’t you think of a better way?”

Lin Weimin pointed out the problem with the script sharply. Xie Xiaojing and Cui Xiaoqin were a little embarrassed and wanted to explain it, but after thinking about it, they found that there seemed to be nothing to explain. There was nothing wrong with what they said.

"You completely wasted the characters' expressions, body movements, and dialogues in this more than one minute scene. Don't you think it's monotonous to just show Sangsang's narration?"

Tian Zhuangzhuang observed the reactions of the two classmates and knew that the two were thin-skinned and were a little bit unable to get off the stage after being reprimanded. He whispered to Lin Weimin: "Teacher Lin, what do you think should be better about this place?"

Lin Weimin shook his head and said: "You must remember that narration must be used with caution. For the audience, a good work must allow them to invest emotionally from the first perspective. Narration, as a means of God's perspective, is related to this point. There are contradictions, even if you tell it from the perspective of the heroine."

"Let's go on to talk about how to change it. First of all, the narration must be removed. There are many ways to highlight the heroine, which can be dealt with using lens language. Another purpose of adding narration is to introduce the characters. Since the narration has been removed, it must be in the lines Deal with character relationships and performances.

For example, the introduction of Lao Jiang is good and should be continued. It only requires simple line processing to make this character stand out..."

After talking about how to change the opening chapter, Lin Weimin pointed out the problem with the plot foreshadowing, "Your foreshadowing is too weak. I guess it may be due to time constraints, but you should do better. "Small Courtyard" itself is based on the story of a family with shortcomings. If you don't do a good job at this point, the work will not stand up from the ground up. I think the problem at the beginning may have something to do with this, you are a bit too hasty."

Cui Xiaoqin nodded hurriedly and said: "Teacher Lin, you are absolutely right. This is also where we are worried."

Lin Weimin said to Xie Fei: "Teacher Xie, I think the quality of the work should be the most important thing. The length of 10 minutes is really too restrictive for the students."

Xie Fei smiled bitterly, "I understand this, but the hospital's funds are limited..."

Halfway through his words, Xie Fei realized that this was not Lin Weimin's or the students' problem, "I'll talk to the college later and try my best to fight for something more."

When the students heard this, smiles appeared on their faces.

Finally, Lin Weimin suggested: "How is your Jingkan situation?"

Tian Zhuangzhuang replied: "We haven't done it yet, but we plan to use the courtyard as a shooting location."

Lin Weimin thought for a while and said to Xie Fei: "I suggest that the students should go to the courtyard to experience life. From the script, I didn't see that you have any understanding of life in the courtyard."

Tian Zhuangzhuang and other students looked a little embarrassed. Lin Weimin only looked at the script they brought for a few minutes before he picked out a lot of flaws that they could not refute. At the same time, he also gave precise suggestions for how to deal with it. .

In just over half an hour, several students were convinced by Lin Weimin's performance.

Xie Fei also didn't expect that Lin Weimin looked young, but was so sharp in creation, and managed to subdue the students who were usually arrogant.

"What Teacher Lin said makes sense. Let them adjust the problems in the script later. What you said about experiencing life is also a good suggestion. I will coordinate it in the past two days so that they can get familiar with life in the courtyard. "

After talking about what was in the script, Lin Weimin showed a warm smile on his face, "What I just said was a bit harsh, don't take it to heart."

Xie Xiaojing waved her hand and said: "Mr. Lin, please don't say that. We have really benefited a lot from your criticism and suggestions just now. It is more useful than the whole semester of classes I have listened to..."

Before he finished speaking, he was stepped on by Cui Xiaoqin, and the teacher was still here.

Lin Weimin said with a smile: "It's different. What the teacher teaches you is theory, which can benefit you for life. But what I teach you is more like practical combat. It is effective for a while, but it cannot be effective for a lifetime."

Tian Zhuangzhuang gave the two of them a look, Teacher Lin can speak, Xie Xiaojing, if you can't speak, just speak less.