After rebirth, I became a great writer

Chapter 141 Many Years Later (Very literary and artistic! Select and order)

"No, it's not good to write like this. No one will be satisfied with the ending, and Yifei won't like it either. How should I change that?"

In front of the computer desk, Chen Tianhong's hands were placed on the keyboard, but they couldn't fly today. He had regressed to the typing speed of his previous life when he was stuck.

Chen Tianhong is writing an ending for "The Spring Breeze Isn't Like You". He has gone back and forth and revised it several times, but he is still not satisfied with it.

Strictly speaking, this story is the first work he wrote when he came to this world, because almost all his previous works were "borrowed".

In the previous life, there was a work called "Ten Miles of Spring Breeze Is Not as Good as You", and the author was named Feng Tang. However, this work in the previous life was not a novel, but more like a collection of prose poems.

The story of Qiushui and Xiaohong is actually from another novel by Feng Tang called "B***J".

Chen Tianhong would never "borrow" this "B***J", nor would he dare to write it, because the original work was too wild, and some of the sentences in it were very sensitive and explicit. As long as he wrote it, he would definitely

Harmonized by 404.

Moreover, the ending of the story in the original work is sad. Qiu Shui and Xiao Hong did not end up together. In fact, they have never been together.

Especially the poem "To the Oak" written by Shu Ting is not in the original work at all. It was in the TV series in the previous life, but it is different from the story written by Chen Tianhong now.

Strictly speaking, the story he is writing now is brand new, and he only borrows the names of the hero and heroine. When he added "To the Oak" to the storyline, he was also touched by Liu Yifei's love values, and naturally he was reminded of this very special song.

Poetry for the occasion.

After thinking carefully for a while, Chen Tianhong finally came up with a satisfactory ending.

It has to be said that his writing skills have improved a lot since he came to this world. Firstly, this is due to the fact that he writes novels and is considered an insider in the industry. Secondly, his teacher Cao Xingkui often teaches him writing experience.

, coupled with Chen Tianhong’s own hard study.

All of this combined, Chen Tianhong's writing skills can fully enable him to write a high-quality story.

Of course, "Ten Miles of Spring Breeze Is Not as Good as You" can be recognized by many fans, and "To the Oak" and "Fragmented Chapter", two very famous poems in the previous life, are also indispensable, especially the former, which can be said to be the finishing touch.

Half an hour later, Chen Tianhong brought an end to "Spring Breeze Ten Miles Like You". Because this story was originally written for Liu Yifei, the ending is happy.

There are not many words in this story, only about 20,000 words in total. Chen Tianhong didn't expect to make any money, so he published it on a literary forum.

Next, Chen Tianhong logged into the literary forum, edited and updated the post. Then he took out his mobile phone and sent a message to Liu Yifei.

"Yifei, I have finished writing the ending of the story and uploaded it. You can go and read it."

Soon, Liu Yifei replied to the message.

"Okay, Qiu Shui!"

There is also a loving and naughty expression on the back.

Seeing what Liu Yifei called him, Chen Tianhong couldn't help but smile.

Liu Yifei liked this story very much and just told Chen Tianhong that she was not as great as Xiao Hong, but she liked the poem "To the Oak" very much and thought it was about true love.

Xie Shiqi doesn’t know how many times she has refreshed her post. Waiting for updates is the most uncomfortable thing, especially when she sees something wonderful.

Finally, after she refreshed the post again, the post was updated.

“It’s been updated, but there are so few words!”

Xie Shiqi was very happy at first, but after seeing that there were not many words in the update, she pouted again.

The next plot jumps a lot, and it does not continue with the wedding, but directly with a sentence many years later.

They came to old age together. At this time, Xiao Hong was no longer ordinary. Since the song "To the Oak Tree", she has also become a female poet. She and Qiu Shui have long been famous in the entire poetry world, and their stories have already become famous in the circle.

became a legend.

On this day, Qiu Shui and Xiao Hong were invited by their alma mater and came to the place where they fell in love.

It is April at this time, the spring color is deep, the flowers in the alma mater are red and willows are green, the spring color is like the tide, and the flowers are like the sea.

Qiu Shui and Xiao Hong walked hand in hand in this strange but extremely familiar campus, and long-lost memories came to mind.

Time flies by and the trajectory of fate moves forward, but the traces of their youth will always remain.

They walked silently, I held your hand, and you held my hand, walking slowly.

The two finally stopped in front of a lush oak tree.

Qiu Shui turned to look at Xiao Hong, at her strands of hair on the temples that had been bleached by time, and then at the green leaves of the oak tree.

"I am reminded of your song "To the Oak Tree". It's a pity that there is no kapok next to the oak tree in front of us. We are all old!"

Xiao Hong also looked at Qiu Shui, looking at the wrinkles on his face carved by time, and couldn't help but tighten his hand holding Qiu Shui's hand.

"But we are very happy! Aren't we? Qiu Shui. I want to hear the song you wrote. Can you still hum it now?"

Qiu Shui was startled, and memories rushed back to his face.

I remember that at the wedding that day, when they were confessing their love to each other, Xiao Hong wrote "To the Oak" for him, and Qiu Shui also prepared a special gift for her.

This gift was also a poem he wrote, and Qiu Shui asked a friend to compose the music for this poem, and sang this loving song at the wedding.

The name of this poem is "The spring breeze is not as good as you."

"Of course! Even if I forget all the poems I wrote, I will never forget this poem. I will hum it to you."

The spring sunshine passed through the branches and leaves of the oak tree and scattered on the two of them, and a song softly sounded.

"Finally, I couldn't hold on to my loneliness, and let my heart quietly unlock,

My heart surges up gradually, like a thawing glacier

I don’t know how to describe you, the warmth remains in my heart

Close your eyes tightly and don’t let go of any sweetness

I don’t know how to describe me, only you make me happy

Even in the ice and snow, there is spring in my eyes

I don’t know how to find you, spring is already here

I don’t know how to describe you, the spring breeze is not as good as yours.

During the singing, the two of them depended on each other.

"Qiushui, let's complete that poem!"

"You mean the song "Many Years Later" that we didn't finish writing?"

"Well, I've thought about the follow-up."

"I thought about it too."

The two looked at each other and smiled.

Qiu Shui chanted first.

"On a dusk with lingering afterglow, clouds and clouds render the sky colorful. When we meet by chance somewhere and recognize each other, the calm sea of ​​our hearts suddenly becomes turbulent, just like the first time we met."

"Do you remember those happy past events?"

"Do you remember those days when we exorcised each other's loneliness?"

"Do you remember the laughter that often echoed in your ears, and the beautiful youth we spent wantonly!"

"You suddenly smiled knowingly. That smile reminded me of your beauty when you were young."

"I also laughed. Time flies by, but the light of love still shines in our hearts."

"I really want to read the world of birds singing and fragrant flowers with you every time the sun rises, and enjoy the scenery with high sky and clear clouds."

"I really want to experience the romance of the mountains and rivers with you every sunset, and relive the unforgettable memories together."

"Cherish it! Time flies by. Don't be lonely and ignore the happiness in front of you."

"Many years later, we will all be old! If my heart is still beating at that time, I will have a dream, a distant and beautiful dream!"

Qiu Shui read out the last sentence.

All of this is like a scene in a dream. I intend to write more, but in the end all the words merge into one sentence, a life of silence, a life of unrestrainedness, a life of dullness. The spring breeze is not as good as yours, and the time is worthy of you.

The story was over, but Xie Shiqi couldn't calm down for a long time. She had read many novels, but she had never seen such an ending. It ended with two poems.

At this moment, Xie Shiqi just wants to say one thing: Hongwen, you are too romantic!

Especially the last song "Many Years Later" touched her so much.

Who doesn't want to have such a love?

Who doesn’t want to get along with his lover and grow old hand in hand?

They understand each other deeply. This kind of love can bring to life all the years in the past, brighten the whole life, and can look back on the past in the last days without any regrets or regrets.

Because they will always fall in love at first sight just like they did in the beginning.

Xie Shiqi wants to get married! She really wants to get married. Once this idea arises, she can no longer suppress it.

"Hongwen! Hongwen. This is the love you yearn for in your dream, and why is it not the love we yearn for."

But is there a love like Qiu Shui and Xiao Hong in reality?

Yes, there must be some. The story is derived from reality. It is impossible to say that such love will be performed in a certain corner of the world.

Although the story of "Ten Miles of Spring Breeze Is Not as Good as You" has ended, the popularity it aroused on literary forums has not diminished but increased, especially the several poems involved in the story.

Some fans have reposted these poems into the poetry group.

At this time, the first popular post in the poetry group was the one reposted by the first fan.

[A poem that is absolutely incomprehensible without reading the story.]

When I first forwarded it, although the title attracted some people's attention, it did not gain much popularity. It was not until Hongwen finished writing the story and the poster reposted a few poems that the popularity increased.

, even professional poets in the circle have commented on it.

[Chen rises and falls in the city]: I didn’t expect that this post of mine would rank first among the group’s popularity, haha, thank you Hongwen! My dream has come true, my dream has come true.

I saw a lot of people scolding me for making headlines, saying that "To the Oaks" can be understood without reading the story. Hey, of course I agree with this, but who of you dares to say with confidence that you can understand it after just reading it once? No.

Hazy? Of course, let alone professional poets! Don’t you think this poem is easier to understand when paired with a story? And doesn’t “The Spring Breeze Ten Miles Away As You” written by Hongwen not look good?

[Leave blank]: Well said, the poster. I was one of the first people to comment. At first, I could understand the general meaning of "To the Oak", but I didn't understand the meaning of the oak tree and the kapok tree. Later, I

I didn’t understand until I read the story. I just want to say one thing now: Hongwen is amazing, his poems are good, his stories are good, and more importantly, his love values ​​are very upright. I like this kind of writer.

[Listen to the noise]: "To the Oak" is very well written, and it is the main line of this story. But the other poems are also very good! I personally like the one at the end of "Many Years Later" better, although the artistic conception is better than "To the Oak".

"Oak Tree" is a bit bad, but it is simple and easy to understand, and I think spending the rest of your life hand in hand is much more romantic than standing side by side.

[Three Good Students]: Well, the elder brother upstairs said it well. There are four poems written in the story. The one I understand most clearly is "Many Years Later". Hehe, the level of student party is limited. I wonder if there are any professional people who can comment on it.

Post the rest of the poems! No need for "To the Oak". I think everyone's analysis is very clear, but the rest are still a bit confused.

[Poetry Lao Mo]: Don’t ever say that the level of the student party is limited. It was possible before, but forget it now! You must know that Hongwen is also a student. It’s really embarrassing. The poems written by a student even surpass those of us in the poetry circle.

old man.

So let me briefly comment on the four-line poem that appears in the story. Although it has no name, the artistic conception is very high. I personally like it very much.

"You stand on the bridge and look at the scenery, and the people watching the scenery are watching you upstairs."

The first two sentences make people think of a picture at first glance. You stand on the bridge and look at the scenery. What scenery will everyone want to see next?

However, the pen and ink are not used in the description of the scenery, but this does not affect our imagination. For example, I will think of the flowing water, the cruise ship, the willows on the bank...

Then in the next sentence, another viewer appears, and he is looking at you. This is very interesting. In the same time and space, the characters and scenery remain the same, but the perceived status has changed. The first sentence

You are still the subject, admiring the scenery, but by the second sentence you have changed from the person looking at the scenery to the person being looked at. This is a very interesting dramatic effect.

"The bright moon decorates your windows, and you decorate other people's dreams."

These two sentences are the same as the previous two sentences. They are still the exchange of subject and object positions, but they are sublimated in terms of sentences. When you are the subject, the moonlight by the window is the scenery you see, but you don’t know it.

At this time, you have entered someone else's dream and become the scenery she sees.

Generally speaking, this four-line poem gives people a strong sense of picture when reading it, as if it is an ink painting right in front of our eyes, with rich meaning and delicate emotions.

There is a saying in our poetry circle that "a good poem can be read a hundred times", and these four short sentences are enough for us to read it many times, and will definitely produce lasting artistic charm.

These four sentences are very appropriate at the beginning of the story! The male protagonist Qiu Shui is admiring the beauty of the heroine Xiao Hong by the window, but little does he know that Xiao Hong is also in love with him upstairs. These few sentences fully express the character

The lingering emotions in our hearts have deeply engraved this picture in our minds, making us recall and stimulate our imagination. What a story and poem!

I have already made suggestions to the president of the poetry circle and invited Hongwen to join our Chinese poetry circle.

As for the remaining two poems, I won’t comment anymore!

[Down-and-out Poet]: Haha, Lao Mo’s eyes are really naughty. It seems that you want Hongwen to write poetry in the future! I think it’s quite difficult. Don’t forget that Hongwen is a writer. Mr. Feng still wants to

He took him as his apprentice to write about martial arts.

[Poetry Lao Mo]: Why not? There is no conflict between writing poetry and writing novels. Are you feeling sad as a down-and-out poet? If you ask me to write poems well, instead of always thinking about being new and different every day, you will have a chance to enter the poetry world.

[Down-and-out Poet]: Forget it, if I don’t enter, I’m so relaxed now. Now that you, Mo, have finished reviewing this short poem, I’ll talk about the remaining two! You people in the poetry world are just too reserved.

, I know that the following two poems and "To the Oak" are quite different in artistic conception compared with the four-line short poem, so I don't bother to write and ink. I would say that judging a poem cannot be so one-sided.

The name of the next poem is "Spring Breeze Ten Miles Away from You", which is the same as the name of the story. It is said to be a poem, but I think it is actually a song.

The entire lyrics are very fresh and romantic, unfolding the love relationship between the male and female protagonists in their youth, and can be divided into three sections.

From the initial restlessness of "I don't know how to find you, the fragrance is still in my arms", to the throbbing of "I don't know how to describe you, the warmth remains in my heart", to "I don't know how to describe you, only you let me know"

I am happy." This is my heartbeat.

To put it bluntly, this song was written entirely by Hongwen to heighten the plot, which can be seen from the last sentence, "I don't know how to describe you, the spring breeze is not as good as you."

Generally speaking, the lyrics are well written, but they are just lyrics. If Hongwen arranged the music and a singer sang it, it might make people feel emotional.

Finally, there is the closing chapter "Many Years Later". This is a modern poem. How should I put it? The sentences and words in the whole poem are not very gorgeous. Even most of the writing is very plain, and there is no particularly profound artistic conception in it.

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What I want to express throughout this article can be described in sixteen words. If we fall in love, we will grow old hand in hand. Our original intention remains unchanged and we will have no regrets in this life. Everyone likes romance, and they express romance to their partners in different ways. To do this,

I said that true romance is to accompany the other person as they grow older.

This poem was written by Hongwen in order to give the story of Qiu Shui and Xiao Hong a happy ending. Many years later, when they were old, they finally came to the oak tree hand in hand. The two looked at each other. This scene was just like their first time.

When they met, the two remembered the happy past, the laughter that echoed in their ears, and the beautiful youth that was exclusive to them.

Although Xiao Hong's face has become older, her smile reminds Qiu Shui of what she looked like when she was young. The spring breeze is not as good as your peach blossom smile.

Until the last sentence "I will have a dream, a distant and beautiful dream..."

This is Hongwen's own sigh. He said at the beginning that this story was a picture in his dream, so it started with a dream and ended with a dream. Hongwen. It is really romantic!

[Flying Sand]: You two are really gods. What you said is so good. I wouldn’t have known it had so many meanings without reading your comments. Now I admire Hongwen so much! So awesome!

[Coming to the world in September]: The poet who is down and out said it well. I want to listen to the song "The spring breeze is not as good as yours". It is a pity that Hongwen is a writer. It would be great if he could also compose music. It would be a pity that I can't listen to this song!

[The lights have fallen]: Brother, don’t ask for too much. Hongwen is already a genius. If he can compose music again, will he still be a human being? It’s good to have good stories to read and good poems to appreciate. Don’t ask for perfection.

But I am very curious, is this really what Hongwen dreamed about? Could this girl actually exist? Is Hongwen in love?

[Shadow Wolf Love]: Holy shit, your last sentence upstairs is the truth! I also think it’s a bit ridiculous. You can dream stories and dream up such good poems. You must be a liar!

I agree that it was Hongwen's own idea. But if it was really his own idea, then there must be references. Just like the story of Lu Qinyang and Ling Yiyao some time ago, it was based on the story of the boss and Xin'er.

[Oda Yuetang]: Wow! I think what you said makes sense! If this is the case, then Qiushui is Hongwen and Xiao Hong is her girlfriend. Does Hongwen have a girlfriend? Who is so happy! Hongwen, come out and speak!

[Picture Book]: Hongwen! Come out! Satisfy our curiosity.

【Brush and Ink】: Summon Hongwen.

I don’t know if you like the ending I wrote. If you don’t like it, don’t tell me. I quite like it. There is an Easter egg chapter! Thank you to Wanyue Kongxin and Junmai Daiginjo for your monthly votes, and thank you for your subscription support!

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