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Chapter 291 What to do if the script is too bad? (Additional update, 6,000 words!)

Chen Ziyan's question echoed in Lu Yanhe's mind for a long time.

He was also wondering why he hadn't thought of writing a script for himself?

After thinking about it, he felt that the reason was probably because he subconsciously knew what those movies looked like, and he knew that if he wrote a script for himself, he would fall into a complicated tangle.

This tangle was his subconscious imitation of the original work, his lack of confidence in himself, and the hidden sense of shame that he could not surpass the original work.

However, Lu Yanhe could not explain this to Chen Ziyan.

Why could he read the scripts of this world with a normal heart?

Because these scripts did not have a formed image in his mind, nor a completed performance, he could interpret them according to his own understanding.

But the scripts he wrote himself - the film and television dramas from the world before he crossed over, were all works that had already been completed. When Lu Yanhe wrote the script, the scenes in the completed film emerged in his mind.

A cry, a laugh, or anger, or sadness, all had references.

Lu Yanhe would imitate subconsciously.

But once the performance becomes a subconscious imitation, no matter how similar the imitation is, it loses the most critical part of the performance, the substitution and empathy from the depths of the soul.

Moreover, he will subconsciously feel that his performance is not as good as the original.

Without self-confidence, the actor's performance will become extremely fragile.

After so many thoughts flashed through Lu Yanhe's mind, he couldn't help but sigh that he had only acted in a few plays, and he told himself so many well-reasoned truths.

To put it bluntly, it's still to find motivations and excuses for his behavior.

Lu Yanhe took a deep breath.

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Lu Yanhe sent the revised scripts of "Raise the Red Lantern" and "Rouge Button" to Chen Bige:

Sister Bige, the first draft of the script has been written.

Lu Yanhe breathed a sigh of relief after getting this done.

So far, he has written three scripts, and the fourth script will be "Dumb and Dumber" for Li Zhibai and Yan Liang.

The original movie starred Jim Carrey and Jeff Daniels, and it is a classic comedy movie.

Lu Yanhe has a principle for adapting movies from his memory, that is, the storyline is strong enough.

Lu Yanhe also likes many movies, and they are also classics, but they are not strong in the script. If you really read the script, it may be a very boring and simple story, or an essay without a main storyline, or the movie is not mainly good in the script. Those movies were passed by Lu Yanhe. It's not that he doesn't like it, but it can't be reproduced through the script. For example, Wong Kar-wai's "The Grandmaster" and a very famous Hollywood musical "Mamma Mia".

"Dumb and Dumber" was watched by Lu Yanhe and his classmates. Lu Yanhe still remembers that when watching this movie, he and his classmates laughed so hard that they fell backwards.

And this movie is also the first movie that Lu Yanhe thought of, suitable for Li Zhibai and Yan Liang to star together.

It's just that this movie needs to be adapted a little by him, and the ages of the two protagonists need to be changed to be slightly younger. Of course, Lu Yanhe chose it precisely because the whole plot is suitable for Li Zhibai and Yan Liang to play, as long as they can let go.

And Lu Yanhe doesn't want to change the name.

Translating Dumb and Dumber into Ah Dai and Ah Gua completely follows the Chinese expression feeling.

The Dumb and Gua combination.

One is Ah Dai and Ah Gua, and the other is Squid Game. These are the two scripts that Lu Yanhe is writing.

Hu Siwei came over at this time.

"The first draft of the script has been written." He came to Lu Yanhe and said, "This is the script."

Hu Siwei handed a script to Lu Yanhe.

Eight-episode short play, "Under the Eaves".

Lu Yanhe was stunned.

This name... somehow made him feel that it was not very popular.

"Regarding the script, you can tell me what you think." Hu Siwei said, "This is only the first four episodes of the first draft, and there should be a lot of changes later."

Lu Yanhe nodded.

He said, "I'll take a look first."

Hu Siwei agreed.

Although the script of "Under the Eaves" looks thick, it actually doesn't have many words.

Lu Yanhe spent almost only one afternoon to finish reading the script.

He didn't know how to describe his feelings. This script... was a bit unsatisfactory.

He has watched good sitcoms such as "Friends", "The Big Bang Theory" and "I Love My Family" and knows what a good life comedy looks like.

It doesn't have to be high-level or beautifully written, but it must have a sense of life and look like what happens in our lives.

But it must be natural and have a sense of life.

From the beginning of "Under the Eaves", there is a sentence next to it: "We have learned the word friendship in class since we were young, but maybe we will not understand what friendship is until a long time later."

It can't be said to be mysterious, anyway, it is very artificial.

Lu Yanhe frowned and read the script, not knowing where to start.

When he was reading the project book and looking at the story outline, he clearly felt that this story would be a very interesting story, but how could it be so boring when it was written into a script?

Lu Yanhe closed the script silently and thought for a long time.

They are going to use such a script to make a drama that will turn the tide for the ratings of Beijing and Taiwan?

Lu Yanhe found it incredible.

He sent a message to Hu Siwei: Producer Hu, is this a script written by your friend?

Hu Siwei: No, he asked a screenwriter to write it. What do you think?

Lu Yanhe: I don’t know what to say.

Hu Siwei: It’s okay, just say whatever you want to say. This is the first draft. It is definitely impossible to shoot according to this script. A lot of revisions will be made. It’s normal.

Lu Yanhe said: To be honest, if the script is like this, I don’t want to shoot it.

Hu Siwei: Is it so bad?

Lu Yanhe said: Haven’t you read it?

Hu Siwei: I just flipped through it casually.

Lu Yanhe: Read it yourself first.

Hu Siwei: When you read the story outline before, didn’t you think it was well written?

Lu Yanhe said: The story outline is indeed well written, so I was moved. I even turned down the male lead of a movie for this drama, but I can’t say anything about this script.

Hu Siwei: The script is so bad? I'll read it carefully.

Lu Yanhe sighed.

After all this time, Hu Siwei didn't even read the script.

Lu Yanhe really felt that the script of "Under the Eaves" was terrible. After talking with Hu Siwei, he thought about it for a long time and tried to write the first episode according to the script outline he had read before.

In short, it was to change the script.

This drama tells the story of six young people who met and became friends in a city.

It doesn't have a clear main storyline. It basically tells the happiness and troubles in their lives and work, as well as the various jokes that happened in the middle.

In the script outline that Lu Yanhe had read before, these six people were clearly set up. Six different personalities and six different professional backgrounds intersected and collided with various stories.

There is no complicated plot and reversal, just a comedy of life.

Lu Yanhe thought for a long time and decided to combine the first episodes of "Friends" and "The Big Bang Theory" to write the beginning of this story.

Because her fiancé Hu Fan's ex-girlfriend came to her dressing room on the wedding day and told her that she was pregnant with Hu Fan's child, Li Lili ran away from the wedding scene. As a result, she happened to see her former good friend Chen Wanqiu outside a cafe, so she rushed in and met Chen Wanqiu and her friends.

Li Lili had nowhere to go, so she was taken in by Chen Wanqiu. Jiang Kele and Wen Fan, who lived in the same apartment building, were attracted to Li Lili, who was beautiful and had a sweet smile, and wanted to pursue her, so they launched their own offensive.

In order to get her things out of her fiancé's house, Li Lili asked everyone to accompany her to her fiancé's house. When everyone knew that Li Lili suddenly left the wedding scene and left a mess, they began to sympathize with her fiancé Hu Fan. Seeing that everyone began to sympathize with Hu Fan, Li Lili angrily told the reason why she ran away. Hu Fan said that it was impossible because he had never had sex with his ex-girlfriend. Li Lili didn't believe it.

In order to make Li Lili change her mind, Hu Fan also moved to their apartment building.

This is the content of the first episode.

For a sitcom, the first episode is a hook, but this hook cannot be too complicated. The process must be relaxed and funny, and the ending must make everyone want to know what happened next.

And several people suddenly gathered in one place from different places, which is one of the most classic hooks, and naturally makes the audience curious about the story after these people get together.

Lu Yanhe wrote the script for the first episode, read it again, modified some details, and sent it to Hu Siwei.

He said: This is the script of the first episode that I have modified, Producer Hu, this is the script I want to read.

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Hu Siwei only read the first two episodes of the script and admitted that the script was indeed bad.

He picked up his phone and called Bai Jingnian: "Brother, where did you find the script written by a scumbag screenwriter?"

He was not polite at all.

Bai Jingnian asked: "Have you read the script?"

"I read the first two episodes, and it's so bad that I don't want to say anything." Hu Siwei said directly.

Bai Jingnian sighed, "I'm speechless too. I spent a lot of money to find a well-known screenwriter to write it, but he gave me this kind of thing."

"Who?"

"He Shize."

"He has stopped writing scripts himself. He opened a screenwriting studio and threw all the work to his apprentices." Hu Siwei said, "No wonder the script is so bad. Didn't you say you would write the script yourself before?"

"I found that I couldn't write it. I thought of this story outline and thought I could write it myself, but it turned out that I was not that kind of material at all." Bai Jingnian sighed, "Send it to Lu Yanhe to see What did he say? "

Hu Siwei: "I've said it so many times, do you think he will say it?"

Bai Jingnian: "It's my fault. I didn't ask you before I found the screenwriter. I said why did that old guy only charge me 50,000 yuan per episode."

Hu Siwei was shocked and asked: "You have already spent 400,000 yuan?"

"I haven't paid him the balance yet, but I paid a deposit." Bai Jingnian said, "I'm going to call him and scold him, and I don't plan to pay the balance."

Hu Siwei: "How can you do things like this? Have you signed the contract?"

Bai Jingnian: "I signed it. I will write the next four episodes after the first four episodes are over."

"Then we definitely can't ask him to write it." Hu Siwei said, "I'll talk to him. How dare he charge 50,000 per episode for this crappy script."

Bai Jingnian: "What should we do? Lu Yanhe is not satisfied with the script. We have to find someone to rewrite it."

Hu Siwei thought for a while and said, "Let me see which screenwriter is more suitable."

After hanging up the phone, Hu Siwei sighed, but saw an unread message on his phone.

At a glance, it turned out to be a document sent by Lu Yanhe.

-This is the script of the first episode I revised. Producer Hu, this is the script I want to read.

Hu Siwei was stunned.

Lu Yanhe had told him before that he had a sitcom script he wanted to write, but he didn't expect Lu Yanhe to write it himself so quickly.

But Hu Siwei didn't take it too seriously.

What kind of script can an actor who has just started acting write?

They all feel good about themselves after writing.

Hu Siwei opened the document and was stunned just after reading the first few lines.

……

A City, Encounter Cafe, located in the bustling city center of A City.

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Chen Wanqiu: Can you two stop looking at the woman by the window with such lustful eyes? It makes me feel ashamed to sit with you.

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Jiang Kele: Haven't you learned "A beautiful lady is a good match for a gentleman"? -

Wen Fan: Translated into vernacular, it means we like to look at beautiful women.

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Chen Wanqiu silently rolled her eyes at Zhou Zhixi.

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Zhou Zhixi: That's why I keep telling you that men are all vulgar.

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Chen Wanqiu: Honey, don't put your hand on my thigh while saying that men are all vulgar.

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Jiang Kele and Wen Fan turned around at the same time, and glanced at Zhou Zhixi and Chen Wanqiu with ambiguous eyes.

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Zhou Zhixi immediately took his hand away from Chen Wanqiu's leg, and the two of them made disgusting expressions at the same time.

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Zhou Zhixi: If you look at us like this again, I will poke your eyeballs out!

Hu Siwei has worked in Beijing and Taiwan for many years. He has been a producer and supervisor of many dramas. He has also worked as an assistant director and a financial officer. All his work over the years has been dealing with the crew, and he has read countless scripts.

What is a good script?

Hu Siwei has his own criteria for judgment, that is, a script that makes people want to read on.

Unlike novels, scripts do not have narrative, introductory, or foreshadowing descriptions.

The first thing is the location, characters, and lines.

The beginning written by Lu Yanhe is not exquisite, of course it cannot be called exquisite, but several main characters are all introduced, and in just a few sentences of dialogue, the main personality and relationship of each character are presented, as well as the changes in emotions and states.

Hu Siwei's professional acumen reminds him that at least this beginning is a good beginning.

And when he read the end of the first episode, he was stunned again.

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Li Lili picked up the garbage bag and prepared to throw away the garbage.

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Chen Wanqiu: I think Hu Fan is pretty good, handsome, and emotionally stable. You messed up your wedding, but he was still gentle to you. If he didn't lie, you should seriously consider marrying him.

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Li Lili said as she opened the door: If he didn't lie, then it was really me who messed up our wedding. How can I face him?

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After Li Lili finished speaking, she opened the door and walked to the corridor.

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The neighbor's door was open, and two men were moving a TV in.

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Chen Wanqiu walked to the door and asked: Is someone finally going to live next door? -

Hu Fan came up the stairs with a box in his arms, and smiled at them when he saw them.

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Li Lili asked in surprise: Why are you here? -

Hu Fan said: You don't believe me, so I have to move in. We will be neighbors from now on.

...

Hu Siwei put down his phone and stared at the night outside the window.

He actually read the first episode of the script written by Lu Yanhe in one breath. It was smooth and natural, and there were many hilarious scenes in the middle.

There was only one question left in Hu Siwei's mind: Was this really written by Lu Yanhe?

After a while, he realized another question: Was this written by Lu Yanhe in just a few hours?

From the time he handed the script to Lu Yanhe, to Lu Yanhe telling him that the script was bad, to Lu Yanhe sending him the first episode script he wrote, it took no more than ten hours in total.

Hu Siwei was stunned.

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"You said this script was written by Lu Yanhe himself?"

Bai Jingnian looked at Hu Siwei in disbelief and asked.

Late at night, Bai Jingnian had gone to bed, and suddenly Hu Siwei knocked on the door and broke in. Bai Jingnian thought something big had happened, but Hu Siwei told him that he had a new script here, the first episode, and urged him to read the script.

Bai Jingnian was still very unhappy, but after reading the script, his expression immediately changed, and he asked him who wrote this script.

"If you had told me earlier that you had found someone to write the script, why would I have gone to find He Shize." Bai Jingnian thought this was written by the screenwriter Hu Siwei had found before.

When Hu Siwei explained how the script came about, Bai Jingnian fell into the same state of disbelief that Hu Siwei had initially felt.

Hu Siwei: "It was written by Lu Yanhe, and he just wrote it."

"How is it possible?" Bai Jingnian looked at Hu Siwei in disbelief, "He wrote this episode in just a few hours?"

Hu Siwei: "That should be the case."

The two looked at each other.

After a long while, Bai Jingnian said, "Hu Siwei, we have to get Lu Yanhe to agree to help us write the script."

Hu Siwei looked at him and said, "The question now is whether he is willing to help us write the script."

Bai Jingnian said, "What is our budget for the script?"

Hu Siwei said, "The original budget was 200,000 per episode."

Bai Jingnian said, "Do you think Lu Yanhe will agree?"

Hu Siwei shook his head, "He is short of 1.6 million?"

Bai Jingnian: "What should we do then?"

Hu Siwei pondered for a moment, "I'll talk to him and see what he thinks."

"We must get him to agree to write the script." Bai Jingnian said, "He perfectly wrote the feeling I want."

Hu Siwei glanced at him.

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The next day, Lu Yanhe sat in the school cafe, looking at Hu Siwei and Bai Jingnian sitting opposite him with a serious face.

The two people opposite looked a little nervous.

Others found this scene strange.

A young student was calm and serious, while the two middle-aged men were as nervous as students waiting for their instructor's evaluation.

"You want me to be the screenwriter of this play?" Lu Yanhe confirmed again.

Bai Jingnian nodded immediately and said, "Yes, to be honest, I wanted to write the script myself at first, but after writing a little, I couldn't write the feeling I wanted, so I asked someone else to write it. As a result, the person I found was also rubbish and fooled me. Hu Siwei came to me with the script you wrote late last night. I was so excited that I couldn't sleep after reading it."

Lu Yanhe was a little surprised, "The script I wrote is not that good, right? You are exaggerating."

"Absolutely not exaggerated, it's the feeling I want." Bai Jingnian said, "I just want to write about the most ordinary side of a few young people. What they experience is dramatic and comedic, but their living conditions are absolutely lifelike."

Lu Yanhe understood what he was talking about.

He nodded.

"It's okay for me to be the screenwriter, but I have a few requirements," he said.

Hu Siwei: "You said, as long as we can satisfy, we will definitely satisfy."

Lu Yanhe said: "First, the name of this drama needs to be changed. I don't like the name "Under the Eaves."

Hu Siwei looked at Bai Jingnian.

This name was chosen by Bai Jingnian himself.

Bai Jingnian nodded without hesitation and said: "No problem, you decide."

Lu Yanhe said again: "Second, there are two roles in it. I have target actors. I hope to leave these two roles to my target actors."

Bai Jingnian looked at Hu Siwei.

Hu Siwei said: "As long as it does not exceed our salary budget, no problem."

Lu Yanhe nodded, "Of course."

Hu Siwei thought of something again and asked: "Yanhe, which role are you going to play?"

Lu Yanhe said: "Jiang Kele, he is just an actor in it, which is far from my personality. I want to challenge it."

Hu Siwei was a little surprised when he heard this and said: "But the role of Jiang Kele does not seem to be the most important one?"

Although this is a situation comedy with six people as the protagonists, there is still a bias among the six people.

At least from the story of the first season, Hu Fan is the first male protagonist.

The only main plot is whether Hu Fan and Li Lili can get back together.

Lu Yanhe said: "I don't need to play the most important role, it doesn't matter."

Hu Siwei hesitated for a moment and nodded.

Even if Lu Yanhe is not the first male lead in the plot, he is definitely not a supporting role, which is not impossible.

In fact, according to Hu Siwei's idea, it is best for Lu Yanhe to play the first leading role.

"Then you can increase the weight of Jiang Kele's role in the script." Hu Siwei said, "After all, you are the only first-line actor in the play."

"It doesn't matter, after this drama is broadcast, I think all six people will become first-line actors." Lu Yanhe said calmly, "Producer Hu, I read the project book at the beginning, and I took it with such expectations for this project."

Hu Siwei and Bai Jingnian looked at each other and were silent.

Lu Yanhe was so confident in this drama that neither of them expected it.

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Lu Yanhe took care of the creative matters, and Chen Ziyan took over the other matters.

"The film pay + screenwriter's fee is 2 million yuan per episode. In addition, Yan He will enjoy 10% of the revenue of this drama." Chen Ziyan said.

Hu Siwei was embarrassed instantly.

"10%? Ziyan, this is an almost impossible number." Hu Siwei said.

Chen Ziyan's attitude was very firm, saying: "As the only leading actor and the only screenwriter who can carry the ratings, Yan He deserves this number."

Hu Siwei actually knew that Chen Ziyan was right.

In fact, taking a share is a very common phenomenon in foreign film and television circles, especially for the core characters of a play.

Lu Yanhe is obviously such a core character in this drama.

However, in a traditional TV station like Jingtai, such treatment is almost never given to the main creative staff.

At most, the film pay is higher and the fee is higher.

Chen Ziyan said: "Without Yan He, you will definitely not be able to shoot this drama. You know this very well."

Hu Siwei said: "It is more realistic to raise the pay from 2 million yuan per episode to 5 million yuan per episode than to take 10% of the profits. This is not something I can decide, Zi Yan, and it is difficult for the station to agree to such an approach. They will not be willing to set such a precedent."

Chen Zi Yan said: "That's your business, Producer Hu. If you want to create an evergreen tree that can prolong the life of Beijing and Taiwan, a sitcom that can be done for a long time, then you have to pay the due treatment."

Hu Siwei was silent for a while and said: "The salary plus the screenwriter's fee is 1.5 million yuan per episode, and 5% of the profits. I will go to the station to negotiate."

Chen Zi Yan: "Forget bargaining. 10% is already a small price I have opened. If I really want to open my mouth, I will not ask for too much even if I ask for 20%, you know."

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Now the monthly ticket is 5627, and this chapter is 6,600 words. There is no homework owed.

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