Start playing with the world from Suqing

Yoyo folded his fingers and looked sad.

"Aoki, the prophecy says that the one who had a baby with me was a strange man.

"No power, no reliability, little white face, no work.

"But Aoki doesn't meet any of the conditions, so I want to have a baby with another man." "

No, people like Aoki!" "

You hugged her head and cried, looking distressed.

Aoki was very impressed and liked it, but....

"Yoyo, have you only read one page, just this one, you haven't finished reading it completely. "

Huh?"

Yoyo took back the parchment and read it page by page.

"Yoyo, when you read this letter, Dad is no longer in this world..."

Yoyo continued to read, and the last line of small words made her a thunderbolt.

"The Legend of the Red Devil Heroes" Chapter 1 Author: Yes

, this is the first chapter of a two-page novel, and Yoyo only saw the second page, and didn't read the first page.

I didn't finish the second page, and the last line of words was crumpled and blocked by the page roll, and Yoyo didn't see it at all.

Yoyo's face began to turn red, and his head began to steam, transforming into a steam engine.

Thinking of his previous words is like a confession, and he is so ugly in front of the person he likes.

Coupled with Aoki's full face of teasing, Yoyo screamed, crumpled the two pages into a ball, and fell to the ground.

"Ah!!!!h

"Ahaha~ It's a shame~"

Yoyo feels like he's dead, and he's still in front of Aoki.

Yoyo feels that there is no place for himself in this world, and he will never see Aoki again.

Aoki in the study couldn't help but laugh.

Oh, the little girl is so cute

! It's rare to be so happy! It's

quite funny to be confessed by the little girl in this way.

I feel like my life has reached a climax!

Aoki picked up the paper ball and flattened the two pieces of paper.

He took out a red carbon pen and began to help read the text.

The first revision is too straightforward, and the protagonist's life experience should be revealed little by little, rather than directly showing it all.

The second amendment opinion, the male protagonist is too wasteful, which affects the perception.

Generally speaking, it is best for the male and female protagonists to be capable and good-looking people.

The difference between the male and female protagonists will affect the reader's sense of substitution.

Except for the harem text, the heroines of the harem are not heroines in the strict sense, they are all fat machine cup cannon rack trophies.

After the male protagonist has a strategy, you can arrange for the next harem female protagonist to appear.

Article 3 ,...

......

Aoki not only gave suggestions for revision, but also helped write the character design, outline, and outline.

The capacity to fill into the web text is at least one million words.

It's enough to take it back and write it slowly for a year.

By the way, [Youenough] is a Red Devil clan-based name.

[Teach others to write in online articles, Commander, you're really a bad taste.]

[Worthy of the evil Aoki!]

"Heh, Os, you finally admit that the world I live in is an online text. "

[Does this matter, Commander?

] "It doesn't matter, because it's all too real.

"I once had a dream where a man told me that I could change into a different vest and experience a different life.

"And that person will record my story and turn it into an online article. "

Who's that person?"

[Observer Author...]

"Yes, Dog Author!" "

I really want him to taste the magnetic field rotation, the power of a million horses, and the super invincible, I love you!".